Slapstick

[azurelunatic]

It's surprisingly difficult to choreograph a several-part slapstick brawl. The best viewpoint is, again, from an uninvolved observer. The guy Sally took down is going to be mentally scarred for life, but maybe he'll stop smoking -- at least, stop smoking uninvited indoors in someone else's home. That's really all you can ask for. While Sally's a fanatical enough anti-smoking activist to extend her evangelism to the public smoking materials of those in designated smoking zones (squirt-gun sniping), I consider that overboard at very best (and highly rude). It's fun to write her, though. Chaaaaarge!

I very much like Officer Raoul (yes, a little much PotO on my playlist?) and his parellax view of Ben's last seven years or so. Ben's father's a nut, and deserves Ben's mother. Seriously.

I also like writing minor characters as convincing geeks. The dad in "A Cup of Time" was a DBA; here, Bea's mom is g33x0r. I had to make her geek, actually, so that the "secure" packing that the moving company did was actually Very Bad. witchofrock, a six-person brawl has erupted from your dreadful Army moving adventure. Hee-hee.

For those of you who are reading this as I work on it, more pieces will go up -- later. I'm not 'here' enough to post bits.

Comments

[azurelunatic]

[kokuten.livejournal.com]

I cannot, for the life of me, figure out a legal and morally correct punishment for a squirt-gun sniper.

I'd be mighty hot, though.

[azurelunatic]

It would possibly involve the dumping of a bucket of water over the head of the sniper while they were enjoying a legal pleasure of their own in a spot designated for same, a pleasure not notably improved by dampening.

[kokuten.livejournal.com]

yeah, but what activity?

[azurelunatic]

Probably just minding their own business, in all practicality. Chatting with friends, eating a meal...

Actually, eating a meal is likely to be very ruined by a bucket of water. So perhaps that.